1. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what improved? How did it get better? Why?
I improved the clarity of the sentences in my photo essay so that the reader was able to easily visualize the surroundings of my work space environment from my own perspective. The adjectives of several of the sentences were reorganized into different sequences. The verb and subject noun of each sentence was placed at the beginning of the sentence to establish a more assertive voice for the writing.
The third and final caption in my revised photo essay did not establish an environment for the reader to visualize, unlike the preceding captions. The third caption should have some description of a specific environment so that the consistency of a visualized setting exists in each caption.
3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.
I struggled to create a clean layout for pages 5 & 6 of my photo essay that did not have too much white space. I directed a large portion of my layout-revision-time toward balancing the image and captions so that the amount of white space occupying the layout did not become a focal feature of the design. I enlarged the image so that it bled across the gutter, thus horizontally compressing the caption while extended in vertically. I then placed a pull quote above the caption to reduce the white space. The current amount of white space present in the two pages is no longer an unsightly feature of the layout.
4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.
I learned two new aspects of sentence structure. 1) I learned to place the subject noun and the verb at the beginning of the sentence. 2) The reader may not be able to form a visual image depicted in the sentence if the descriptive details of that sentence are not placed in a logical order.
I improved the clarity of the sentences in my photo essay so that the reader was able to easily visualize the surroundings of my work space environment from my own perspective. The adjectives of several of the sentences were reorganized into different sequences. The verb and subject noun of each sentence was placed at the beginning of the sentence to establish a more assertive voice for the writing.
2. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why?
The third and final caption in my revised photo essay did not establish an environment for the reader to visualize, unlike the preceding captions. The third caption should have some description of a specific environment so that the consistency of a visualized setting exists in each caption.
3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.
I struggled to create a clean layout for pages 5 & 6 of my photo essay that did not have too much white space. I directed a large portion of my layout-revision-time toward balancing the image and captions so that the amount of white space occupying the layout did not become a focal feature of the design. I enlarged the image so that it bled across the gutter, thus horizontally compressing the caption while extended in vertically. I then placed a pull quote above the caption to reduce the white space. The current amount of white space present in the two pages is no longer an unsightly feature of the layout.
4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.
I learned two new aspects of sentence structure. 1) I learned to place the subject noun and the verb at the beginning of the sentence. 2) The reader may not be able to form a visual image depicted in the sentence if the descriptive details of that sentence are not placed in a logical order.
